Life accumulates like clouds
gathering rain
pouring over small moments

Oh yes, I like this one, very atmospheric--dropping on moments of grief, like tears---very well worded.  
L

Got a very nice watery thing going on. I guess I feel less like it's tears and more like fecundity and concern somehow. And attention and rainy days. All sorts of stuff really, so that's a good sign.

Steve.

Hey many thanks lonely and Steve, I forgot about this one!  It was actually the end of a longer poem, and I liked it as a shorty!

Cheers

W

Hello weaver
I love the image
and the metaphores I will concede to,
I have even lightened up on counting sylables......
but long short long???
it is pure arrogance

not bad  

jc

yay!  you've lightened up on syllables!

Now give us a poem, will you?

Please jc, I want some more!

W

I'm not a fan of short poems but this is lovely!

I thought about it some more and accumulated a couple of gathering nits. :0)

Okay, 'accumulates' and 'gathering' are pretty much covering the same ground. As are 'clouds and 'rain'. I don't think the possible phrase/fragment split between L2/L3 is strong enough to make this a fully defined 'p&p' haiku, so it might as well be a one sentence haiku with another very slight possible phrase. In which case, this does the same with less redundancy:

life gathers like clouds
pouring over
small moments

If you disagree with me then you are addicted to language and not the spirit of haiku, dude, haha. Language has nothing to do with haiku. ;0)

Steve.

So that's where you've been, I had no idea my short poem had such impact on your life.  

Of course I'm addicted to language and of course I disagree with you!  That's what we do.

Ok, seriously, it wasn't written as a ku, but turned into one, so you may have some validity to your point.

Wabi Sabi wrote:

I'm not a fan of short poems but this is lovely!

Thank you WS!  Oh that could stand for 'wandering star'!  

hi Weaver,
 think you are writing too generally, pardon my finding this much too hazy...

after Haiti and Chile, I would reply to what seems like a whine by you ,of course, which I am taking out of context, as everyone has obstacles, dark moments, the larger picture on the planet will put all of that into perspective however.


a pail
becomes my washbasin
the ground my bed

 paul